Would You like to read more?

//Would You like to read more?

Would You like to read more?

Hey there!

Thank you so much for reading a chapter from the forthcoming novel: “4 Fathers.”

Would you like to read the next chapter?

I am writing this novel by co-creating it with you, and integrating your feedback.  I’d love to very briefly hear your comments

Please send a mail to 4fathers@awakespeak.com, and briefly tell us

  • which chapter did you just read?
  • What were three things that you liked / that worked for you?
  • What were three things that could gave have been better / more developed

Thats it!  Take a couple of minutes to do this, and we will send you a link to the next chapter

Thanks for your willingness to co-create!

All the best



Feedback for chapter 16: Onions and Chocolate

3 things I liked:

– The description of the kitchen was vivid – i could feel like I was really there!

– Madeline’s character is subtle: I could feel her inner conflict

– The description of how they cooked the onion and chocolate was funny!  it had be in stitches!

3 things could have been better:

– Peter seems like a cardboard cut-tout.  I wanted to know more about him

– The reference to the room mate seems unnecessary

– The joke about the cheese fell flat… leave it out

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